Descripition: In writing we have been learning about complex sentence's. My goal is to use more complex sentences in my writing because I usally use compound sentences. We watched a video about a mouse with big ears. It inspired use to write our own story about an animal with something different.
Feedback/Feedforward: Loki that writing is funny and cool i think you could put some more detail in to it. #jetty
Evaluation: I think I did well because my story is funny. But I need to use more complex sentences because I sometimes fell to lazy to do complex sentences so I just like to compound sentences.
Big Idea: Complex sentences have one sentence that can stand alone then a conjunction and then a sentence that can't stand alone. For example There was a pig named Ben, he had 5 legs. The red writing is my complex sentences.
Feedback/Feedforward: Loki that writing is funny and cool i think you could put some more detail in to it. #jetty
Evaluation: I think I did well because my story is funny. But I need to use more complex sentences because I sometimes fell to lazy to do complex sentences so I just like to compound sentences.
Lachlan, I like the message of your story and how you have made the theme of the the video your own. However, this story is rather brief and lacks the 'punch' that I know you are capable of adding to your story. You surround yourself with well crafted and planned literature, so why not try to use some of those skills in your own writing.
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